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Post by Casey Grey on Mar 8, 2018 2:28:20 GMT -8
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Post by Alyssa Daniels on Mar 9, 2018 8:39:19 GMT -8
Introductory Segment: This was a great piece. We can get so tied up in thinking of our characters as these rock star personalities but forget that they're real human beings. Casey working on her car when she gets the call and acting nonchalant at first was a good approach. I loved when she told the caller that she should be asking them why Elysium is the right place for her. The emotional breakdown after the call really put the perfect bow on this.
"Four Feet Eight and a Half Inches.": A promo that both dropped some knowledge and gave insight to how Casey feels about the upcoming match. I loved how the explanation of the width of train tracks and the way they look running off into the distance tied to the time leading up to the match and the building of false confidence. I did feel like the focus danced around a little bit but not much. Also, with Casey as a face, I felt leaving the coin in the train tracks seemed out of character and more of a heel thing to do cuz, y'know, all the death that could happen because of it.
"Mountain.": This, like the intro piece, really showed just how much of a real person Casey is. She wasn't shy about sharing her discomfort as this journey begins while mixing it with her determination to push as far into the journey as possible. Also, VERY nice job building the match hype! It's an oft forgotten art in this game to be able to hype your match while also addressing why the character thinks they'll win. This is the opening match but listening to Casey tell it, this might as well be the main event! Really made me believe it too. And I still appreciated the aspect that she stole Azzy's car to make the journey but felt differently about the definition of stealing.
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Post by Casey Grey on Mar 9, 2018 23:04:52 GMT -8
Thanks for the reply and feedback, Alyssa.
I must have scrapped my initial promo something like ten times before I started that one. I was staring at the computer one night and it just hit me that I'd heard a "female" version of "House of the Rising Sun" and I found it, listened to it again, and it just set everything up. There's really a lot going on in that promo. The bolt, how she's cleaning her hands while talking to the guy, that little speaker and those lines at the end. Then she throws all her tools out and just sits there. I wanted to hug her after I wrote that.
My first match RP just kinda hit me at work. I don't know why I thought about train tracks but I remembered that they were spaced some weird distance apart and I thought I could use it. The longer I sat there thinking about it the more I felt it...paralleled (lol...sorry...dad joke) Casey's view of the match.
I honestly thought "Mountain" would be hated. I was getting nervous, mainly because I've seen Des's work before at our last fed and I just knew he'd be dropping two big bombs on me, which meant if I didn't have a second one ready I would be rushed at the end. I'm glad you liked the match hype portion, I felt I was weak there. But, for Casey, this is one of her most important matches in her mind, mainly because of her inner struggle with her own ability and legitimacy in the sport.
Again, I really appreciate your feedback!
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